My foul shot

My foul shot

In writing this week we have been looking at the poem foul shot. We had to make our own won we had to use capital letters on each line, record each action on each line, no unnecessary words and use strong action words. 

Girl and pony are five strides away

Jump set at a 1.15m is in there way of winning

She urges her pony on

Saying “You can do it just one jump”

Then with one final kick

The pony gathers her hindquarters

Pushes,

Stretches,

Jumps

The girl throws herself forward

Slides her hands up her pony’s neck

                            

                           

            

Her pony's hindquarters clip the pole

The girl holds her breath

The pole

Wobbles,

Wiggles,
Quivers,

Plays it coy

And then

                    And then

                                        And then

Just before falling

The pole stays put

The girl gives the pony a big sweaty pat.

They did it.